tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8442355297625438730.post4755900354149690313..comments2024-01-09T03:43:05.103-05:00Comments on Y(A)? Cuz We Write!: Teaser TuesdayPam Harrishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09872183610393667619noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8442355297625438730.post-3950525729923123262010-01-20T12:02:15.582-05:002010-01-20T12:02:15.582-05:00Can I put in my two cents?
This sounds like a gre...Can I put in my two cents?<br /><br />This sounds like a great set-up for what's to come in the next moment. My mind was totally in that scene with Gavin. <br /><br />My only suggestion would be to maybe torment the reader more with the intensity in the moment that Gavin tells the boy to pick up the book. There would have been a lot of tension when the bully had to process being ordered around and then slowly turning to Gavin with an are-you-kidding-me kind of look.Melaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11785387670667198873noreply@blogger.com